Deep Thought

"A man would do nothing, if he waited until he could do it so well that no one would find fault with what he has done"
- Cardinal Newman

Wednesday, October 23, 2013

Just counting #OctPoWriMo 2013 day 23

The hundred sixteenth night with you
in park, under the moon
The twenty fourth hour with you
in bed, warming in blanket
The fifth week after we met
a date, hot chocolate and nothing else
Fifty eight minutes I waited
you had brought flowers of color I hated
Third of September
we decided we wont talk anymore
Seventeenth November
we ended up in bed, with no future
two hundred thirty fourth morning
you said; lets get married
Eighty five years together
we sleep now in crypt, forever

Photo credits to my favorite photographer till date- Hardik Photography

12 comments:

  1. Whoa.! Thats awesome..especially the concluding lines. Aavika dhanda kmaal ki ladki h. MERI dost. :D

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  2. This was so beautiful. Like a ship sailing on a calm sea this tale went on smoothly and touched the horizon in a sweet spot. This was awesomeness!

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    1. how beautifully you have painted this very comment. I am a huge fan of yours, really.

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  3. You are awesome man.....what ways .....what usage of words...and I could imagine it all :)
    Very very beautiful :D Kya kamaal likhti ho yaar :)

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    1. itna sunder comment! thank you so much!

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  4. Awesome. I really, really like this a lot. It's really well done.

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    1. Hi Rhi. Am glad you liked it :) thank you so much

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  5. An account of love , so beautifully presented,
    A poem just so splendid!
    This touched the heart and the soul,
    Love really is above all.
    And lucky are those who realise,
    This thing is pure bliss , a pleasant surprise !

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    1. you wrote a beautiful poem here :) thank you so so much for commenting. keep visiting..

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